I watched them all
holding me tight
turning this night
into a daydream of love
Lots of gifts
colors of joy
it was warm
around that tree
only i didn't see Me!
that Me, they all did
I only see you instead
I had to smile
walking this aisle
of hope.
I have been here before
where the sweet memories
savagely brush
this weakened hush
my mind keeps begging for
to fake some strength
That star on top
knows my secret
it shines for me,
with extra glow
perhaps it is time to go
my certain steps along the hall
for now,i don't hear them call
unwrapping their love boxes
of the season
On my way out
I heard your breath
beneath this wreath
One warm shiver flies
as you handled my eyes
resting my wanderings
to your unanswered belongings
in a moment,
I became that me
that you always see
when the others don't
Exclusively
I invited myself
to your Obsession
that me
I love the most to be
with you.
I know by now, it is that true
all i ever really wanted
for Christmas
is you.
40 comments:
I felt every word in this one.........and brushed away a tear.
I feel you there Neva....i do.
thank you!
lovely choice of words.. mines here-http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/01/23/painted-hallways/
Ahhh... to immerse my soul in the comfort of your imagery and lines: Bliss. I miss reading you!
"my mind keeps begging for
to fake some strength"
Beautiful, vulnerable lines. The flow of feeling is magnificent, as is the sentiment and holiday wish.
Tell Santa... you never know.
Nice One Shot!
that you always see
when the others don't...
resonates strongly with me...great flow in your poem..
to be seen by the one we love for who we are that they can only see...yeah i want that for shristmas too...smiles.
I do love your poetry...being seen by the one we love, for truly who we are ....beautiful :)
I really enjoyed this intimate poem. The flow was perfect, great 'OneShot' :)
It´s so beautiful Abeer, I am filled with that special feeling.
Hugs
I liked the simplicity and directness, as well as the intensity of feeling. The search for independent identity is always hardest among those who know us best, and a wise person knows when surrender is the right choice.
This seems like a Christmas I'm longing for. You write such classic love poetry. Gorgeous!
Awesome entry,
Glad to see you shine at JP!
A++
You always provide me with a complete journey, and I always enjoy the ride. Warm wishes! David
sometimes it does take the love another to truly see our own infinite beauty. A deeply touching poem.
YOU are the ultimate romantic!
Hugs,
Lady Nyo
The last line says it all....what a beautiful message in your poem Desert Rose! This is beautiful! :-)
Here's to the love that has the deepest part of our heart yet all we can do is hear them/ feel them in a memory
well written and I am glad to see you - have missed you *hugs*
you are always welcome / always missed
Moon Smiles and have a Wonderful Christmas
it is so tender and bttersweet, so lifelike!
I know, right? It's not just that other person, but the person we feel we can be when we are with them. They don't just take themselves away if they go...they take that version of us we loved, too.
Such sweet words. :) Happy Holidays
Such a beautiful, rich poem. Tangible and vibrant. Loved it!
Nice 1 Pal ..
Well expressed
Take a look on mine Works !!
http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/category/talent-underground/poetry-zone/
Oh that was so beautiful and lovely !! I could feel every word wrapped with so much love and feelings .. Lovely !
where have you been? although you have never left..continually popping up at others blogs and commenting...i hope you are well and i hope this poem doent reflect the Christmas you envisage? The words were sorrowful and yet expressive and well written....
enjoy the festive season and have a great new year..all the best Pete
That star on top shnes for all of us. Wonderful love poem.
Abeer dear,
You always write in a fashion so full of passion and tenderness and the meaning inside each singles word you choose so wisely put...
You shine baabeee!
Hope you are having a full of love time right now...
Hugs
;)
You write with such strength, beauty, and grace. I think Christmas is calling to you now.,
As ever, a delightful blend of image and word - and the words, they ring with feeling. Such love in here...to be truly seen by the one we love and long for, could there be any greater gift? Any greater desire?
Happy Holidays to you, thanks for sharing this!
all make mistakes. no matter what said others. Do not worry. Your heart are amazing. Keep it.
Your poems is wonderful.
Be happy always. My God bless u.
Passion of the mists enthused with a desert rose
A chimera fed by an oasis, a taste of forbidden fruit
Oneself lost bare in desert dunes, to a mountain top consigned
'Ain languorous crimson, to valley's blush green carpet cries
And thus she melted into an ozone driven winter dawn
On the horizon of unsparing corona, at west of middling morn
At the tea houses bare 'hispers 'er blushing shadow cast
In the twilight between evening & night, I felt her will o' wisp again
Then it grew 'older yet, clawing deep within, to my bones
Shuddering taut, crept to warmth of the fireplace
Tiny glowing eyes throwing out unaccounted glares
Comforted I curled unto this divan to spend to atone
And dreamth of forty houries in service of the master's wight Bms
Exotic, sublime take on a religious- and commerce-raped holiday.
Superb work.
Well done! All the feelings, the rhythm of unrhymed lines, the rhyme of lines, the innerness of private emotion among the paper and glitter.
don't celebrate christmas but this one almost made me tear. i can relate a lot. very tender and soft. great work my beautiful talented poet friend :)
Turning to an epicritic prologue of emotions afoot.
To sizzling tinders & gurgling of the kettle's toot.
To the heart vain, euphemisms to the minder pumping lien. Happy Christmas! in sprite of the dianoial spirit.
Thumping a tandem rhythm on eve of this holy day, in a festive play.
Regards
Bms
The pictures are so very beautiful... :)
And your poetry is fabulous...
beautiful sentiments :)
Abeer, there is a warmth in these words that is beyond only seasonal. The words hug the season tight and leave it blushing... but they reach inside... into the soul... and illuminate what lies hidden there... for all eternity.
I wish you the loveliest new year imaginable... filled with the realization of your wishes and dreams... and smiles that extent from eye to eye.
Love you!
Kol sana winti tayyeba!!!
Nevine
There was sadness in this, at least it evoked it in me. It accomplished what poetry should - touch the heart. Nice job.
Beautiful words for this time of year (and all year long).
"I became that me
that you always see
when the others don't"
I love that. :)
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